Mon diner by Charlie

Mon dîner

Je vais parler de ma nourriture.

Premierment j’ai mangé du poisson et des frites aussi j’ai bu de la coca. Pemain je vais manger des escargots car j’adore des escargots. Je prefere un steak-frites car je pense que c’est sensational, néanmoins je vraiment j’aime pomme de terre.  

Comments

[john]

well done you made the text larger to make it look like you did more! :P

[benjamin]

*includes 3 tences
*got some opinions

improve by making it longer and adding more detail

[bob]

well done charlie, this is a grade C paragraph which includes three tenses. you could involve more conplex words or a longer paragraph.